Bordem Kills...well not really

Subject: Bordem Kills...well not really Fri May 28, 2010 1:08 pm

I got bored and wrote a bit more in depth BackStory For Zag it is still a WIP so i will be editing this and adding new stuff form time to time. Also Keep in mind that if there are in grammer error i very dislexic but do ponit them out the best way to learn is by fucking up

Subject: Re: Bordem Kills...well not really Fri May 28, 2010 1:14 pm

The Child

Zagarth is the son of an affair. His parents meet During a Kusagakura Clan meeting. His mother the Ki maiden and His Father the Keto leader Fell in love. During there two year Affair they were tougher many times. But every time they were careful. But the last time they said screw it. And they well screwed it.
Thankfully Zagarth’s mother was still active with her husband so they assumed it was his father. When Zagarth was born they knew he was not his mother’s husband’s son. His hair was brown not the Ki sliver or gray.

In the dead of night Zagarths mother stole him and gave him to Zagarths father. The next day Zagarth’s mother’s body was found out side of the Ki compound with a note on her chest as she as naked that said. “We Found you. We saved You. We Trained you. You Betrayed us. You Broke the Law. You Slept with then enemy. You Now get to Sleep with the Earth. You Don’t Deserve to wear Out cloths. So you get to lie naked for the whole world to see.

As Zag grew up he father kept him hidden form the world everyone assumed he was dead. But in truth Zag was alive. When Zag was Five years old his father told him that he was special but nothing more. When Zag turned Six his father tested him to see if he had Keto or Ki powers or both it was found out he no chakra at all. So Zag Was trained with weapons. Mainly Dual swords and Halbreds.

When Zagarth was eleven His Father decided it was time to tell him the truth of his birth. Zagarth’s Father Took him for walk and explain that him and his mother were in love but they were form different clans and could not stay tougher. When he was born and in till he was out of his mothers Womb everyone even his mother though he was a Full Ki. Then Just after they finished talking three Ki assassin’s jumped out and attacked them. Zagarth’s father fought Brilliantly was a soon overwhelmed. Zag knew he had to do something or his father would die. Just then his right eye activated at red keto. Zagarth then Made Three Chakra blades and rammed them into the targets. Killing them.

The Teen

The next day Zag entered the Kusa Academy and finished a year later. For three years Zag trained and master his keto and all the elements and learned all the D, C and B rank Jutsu he could. At age Fifteen three years after becoming a genin Zag enter the Grass Chunin exams and Finished at the Top. During his Final fight his Left eye activated at Eternal Ki. This was an out rage in the Ki clan because It was a Skill only there leader could gain. When Zag gained it they had to accept him as there leader. Then Once that happened Zag jumped form Chunin to Rounin. After being a Chunin for five years

The Rounin, The Kage, The Immortal

During his First Rounin mission at age twenty he was assailed to stop four rouge Keto’s form forming a demon. He arrived to late and the keto’s where dead and all there chakra had taken shape as a Tiger demon. At some point during the fight The Tiger demon’s chakra and Zag’s fused resulting in Tiger seal that had three level’s. By time Zag got back to Grass War had broken out and The Kage was killed. Ten years later Zag was named the new kage and He did not notice till he got back but His right eye had turned into permant red keto. Twenty years into the war Grass need a spec ops group so Zag formed Umisneshi because Zag and found out that horses had a chakra system.

Another Twenty years later Zag had need of a Assassin Group that could go anywhere and do anything that is still legal. So Zag found the Akane and with the Akane Zag Brought the war to an End Sixty years later. Now With War on the rise again Zag is trying his best to end it fast and still control the New generation Of Ninja’s.

Subject: Re: Bordem Kills...well not really Fri May 28, 2010 2:26 pm

In the second sentence it should be his parents met

In the third paragraph it should say as zag grew up his father........and put a comma(,)between world and everyone. Also in the last sentence of that paragraph you could put or both,however, he had none at all

In the fourth paragraph, second line, it should be he and his mother. In that same line it should say When he was born until.... and in the next line though is supposed to be thought. In the next line it should say Zags father fought brilliantly but was soon overwhelmed

I'll update this soon